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Imalorki
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Can you see her
Flying so far?
Away from her troubles
From her broken heart.

Can you feel her
Falling so fast?
From happiness
That could not last.

She's crying so hard for me
And I'm not where I could be
To help her with the sorrow
She could be gone tomorrow

I feel so helpless where I am
Like I was invisible to her
Couldn't wipe away her tears
Hold her to my heart

Can you see him
Falling from grace?
He had made
Mistakes

Can you feel him
Trembling from sadness?
He told no one of his plight
And cried alone in his room

I feel so useless where I stand
Should I even exist with my failure?
Its not about me
Just those I care for

Can you see it
A brand new day?
I'll try harder
To set things right

Can you feel it
A new beginning?
Sunrise and Sunset
I'll do my best

This sucks doesn't it...
it just came to my head while I was driving home from school today and I had to write it down...just a short and uncomplicated ditty
your thoughts?
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Will anybody comment,critique? yeah...
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Post by Imalorki »

hello? anyone there daring enough to comment
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